17A Elevator Pitch No. 2

I had fail to do the first Pitch No. 1 , at such I did not get any feedback. From all the video I did , I feel like I was able to improve it a lot. I still got nervous and tongue-tight  on occasion, but I felt like I was able to get  all the thing I wanted to said without repetition. I decide to prevent video being static will be for me to walk in a circle. I also emote a bit emotion through the free hand that was not hold by phone that was recording me. I feel like, if got someone to hold camera when doing this video would be much more liberating in term of ability to move and emote pitch. That if I were to do the pitch again, I  will get someone to hold the phone camera and record me, so can do it to more similar example of a pitch meeting that were done in a podium. Overall for a first pitch I think I did decent job, but there is large room for improvement. At such I am open for any advice and criticism about my pitch video.

YouTube Link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=euNpD56XkQU&feature=youtu.be